Sunday, January 22, 2012

The Climb ~ Epilogue


Well Jenny gave us another twist this week.  This time around we have 150 words .... yeah!!! and we have to write an epilogue to our previous entries.  So I have repeated part 1 & part 2 from the last couple of weeks and I have tried my darnedest to wrap the story up with this weeks epilogue.

Part 1

Hanging off a cliff  “keep moving” he thought, “don’t lose momentum,” as he dangled by two arms from the top of the cliff, a bead of sweat trickled into his eye, stinging.  A second passed in an hour, his arms began to shake.  “Focus!” he yelled at himself, knowing full well that his arms could only support his dead weight for a few more moments … he had underestimated the climb … a tragic mistake for any free style climber …he shifted his weight on to his right arm as his left hand searched for something other than sand and soil to grab onto.

Part 2

Panicking now, his left hand sweeping blindly, he finds a root to grasp onto. Summoning his remaining strength he pulls his body up only to hear a loud snap.  He lets out a yelp as he falls. “Jon, you’re having that dream again,” she says sleepily as she pokes him.

Epilogue

“Sorry Babe,” he replies, voice low and shaky.  He hastily wipes the sweat from his brow with the sheet. 
“Jon, what’s going on? I mean is the dream getting worse?”
“It’s okay, it’s okay,” he says, still shaking “I have been seeing someone”
“What the?”
 “No, babe, I mean not like that, I have been seeing a therapist … for a couple of weeks now actually.”
“Whaaaaat?” she says emphatically.
“Yeah, um, I’ve been seeing this guy about my dreams, and at first I thought well he would just tell me it’s no big deal and to just get over it, take a sleeping pill or whatever.
“And?” she whispers
“Well it turns out I have anxiety issues about becoming a father”
“Jon you are an amazing, loving husband, don’t worry, you are going to be great.  Here, feel him kick” as she gently places his hand on her belly.

Thank you so so much for reading, and extra thanks for leaving your comments ... and if you have some time, check out some other 3 part stories ... just check on the Jenny button below.

Jenny Matlock

9 comments:

Izzy said...

Ahhh, what a wonderful ending :)

Karen S. said...

Oh thank goodness, I was hoping it would end like this, instead of all those other sneaky and crass ways it could have gone. Bravo for a delightful insight into real honest to goodness life, for new parents!!!!

anitamombanita said...

Sweet ending! Nicely done. Definitely took a different turn than my dream piece!

Lynn Stevens said...

Awe, Now thats the perfect way to End the story. You left me with a smile on my face :0)

So true to life,having a new baby does feel like your hanging on by a thread!
Hugs Lynn

Judie said...

Jo, I applaud him for having sought a therapist to cope with becoming a new father. This is an excellent ending to your story!! Brava!!

xoxo

Sue said...

This epilogue really closed things out perfectly.

=)

Nonna Beach said...

Oh, Jo,Excellent ! What a sweet and touching epilogue to your wonderful story !!!

Rek said...

Jo, you rocked this...not in my wildest dreams did I anticipate this ending.
Men and their dreams!!!

Jenny said...

I didn't see this coming at all.

Nice twist...and a happy ending. I love it when that happens!