I have cheated a bit …. My main character is male … so I have changed the “she” to “he” … hey, someone has to cheat … it kinda keeps things interesting don’t cha think? And it totally unlevels the playing field and I need any advantage I can get … tee he he
Light streamed in from the window, outside frost laden branches glisten and shone … an eagle circled high above in the brilliant blue sky. The beauty of it all was so sharp and immense that he almost forgot why he left these mountains so many years ago. Turning to the task that lay before him he lifted the stack of letters from the ancient chest, his hands trembled as he fumbled with the faded and tattered bit of pink ribbon that bound them together.
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19 comments:
The first thing that came to mind when I read your offering was when Jeremiah Johnson went back to his cabin after his wife was killed. I was talking with someone today at lunch about the beauty of Utah, where the movie was shot. I'm glad that you made that she/he change. I really should have left out the "she."
I put more of the story on line this afternoon.
I also like your pronoun change. It works very well, and the pink ribbon stands out even more.
Nice, unique take on the prompt.
xoRobyn
Lovely take on the prompt. Do the letters contain clues as to why he left? Nice and intriguing, you could definitely expand this one! Kat
I'm with Kat, intriguing indeed. Very nice :-) And hello to a fellow Canadian!
~Michelle
Great little story, I don't think changing she to he is cheating... it's creative license!! LOL
I'm cool with the she to he change as well.
And I'm intrigued by your story...
=)
Does leave one wondering . . . Nice take! :)
Well done Jo! I admire all of you that follow the Centus event every week!
that changes everything - lol - I mean was he a she before he left; why did he come back? You gotta give us more- we just have to know what all happened - E :)
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Great take on this prompt, and of course she has to be a he...it works for me!
I love your twist on this!
Oh so whats in those letters? I gotta know! LOL
Even though your a rule breaker I loved it LOL. Great change with the prompt. Makes me want to know exactly who the letters were from.
Why DID he leave? Great take on the prompt and it's fine writing also.
Thanks..........cj
I love this!
I love it when someone's brave enough to be original.
well done.
I am totally cool with the fact that the 's' on your keyboard was temporarily disabled.
I don't think you need an advantage. You write these stories so well.
Wonderful visualization... you took me there with him.
I wonder if he's going to be available now. I have a few girlfriends in need of a beau.
Wonderful link!
Very well done story !
Well done! But I wish I could read more. It feels like the beginning of something!
Best wishes,
Anna
P.S.
I'm sorry that I am commenting so late. I am going back to older posts that I have missed.
Here is my SC-text:
'Infrequent visitor' SC week 39
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