Tuesday, December 28, 2010

saturday centus ~ The Fire

Saturday Centus ... so I'm a few days late ... I am once again playing along with Jenny's Saturday Centus ... just click on the button at the bottom to read other entries ... you know the drill by now ... Jenny gives us a prompt to incorporate in our story of less than 100 words. Jenny's prompt is in bold

I found this one tough ... I knew exactly where i wanted to go with it, but in my mind it was a whole chapter ... paring it down to under 100 was really tough for me. Thanks for hanging in a reading my little take on the prompt

The white-bearded fat man rolled through the church doors red faced from both exertion and the cold of a white winter. Snow falls from his great coats as he bustles an armful of firewood to the woodburning stove at the front of the church. Slowly he bends down on one knee and opens the iron gate on the side of the stove … he patiently stacks kindling and wood and carefully sets flame to it all. For him these are the best moments at church, before the preaching and the singing, there is the silence, the quiet, for peaceful meditation in the warmth of the growing fire.

Jenny Matlock

9 comments:

Viki said...

This was lovely. I could see the man bringing in the firewood and lighting the fire. It must be grand to be in the church by himself for a moment. Great Centus.

Lynn Stevens said...

Bravo! clap clap clap. 100 words is too short, I want more!!!

cj Schlottman said...

Jo, This is so touching and heartfelt! What a wonderful little story.

Thanks for your kind comment on my story,

Happy New Year..........cj

Mrs. Nicol said...

more please!!!!

Pat @ Mille Fiori Favoriti said...

You did an excellent job with this prompt, Jo! Your story is wonderful!

Happy 2011 to you and your family! Good health and happiness in the new year!

noexcuses said...

Very reflective. Sort of like a mom's quiet time before the kids all get up! I loved this!

Anna said...

Oh, this was very nice. Bravo! What a lovely centus text. I like all of the quite details of his chore makng the fire.
Very well done!
(I am late with my comments)
Peace & Blessings for the New Year!
Anna
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Anna said...

Just a thought. It seems that you have more to say about this white-bearded man. Who is he? Maybe you can write a longer text. A short story or novella?
Best wishes,
Anna
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Jenny said...

OH. Oh. oh.

This was wonderful.

The imagery you captured here is truly amazing.

What a wondrous read for a chilly New Year morning.

oh.

This story warms my heart, fills my eyes with tears and gives me hope.

Thank you.

Bless you.

I loved this.