The school yard was busy with the games of recess ... watching the kids play "mother may I" he singled her out. Her blonde curls were almost obscured by the hood of her red jacket, and she was at the back of the pack ... too shy to call out "mother may I", and too nervous to make a big move in the game.
Watching from across the road, he took a long drag on his cigarette and smiled in anticipation. "Oh yes, he thought, she is just perfect ... she will be mine before the day is over."
eeeks, something sinister came as i wrote that ... i hate when that happens, but there you go ... make sure you visit other Centus players by clicking on Jenny's button below.
16 comments:
Jo, this is a powerful piece. It gave me chills. Child predators are truly the scum of the earth. You did well, ny dear friend.
This was so bone chilling! I'd like to see the ending, where he is capturing and hung upside down on a meat hook! Always been my fantasy for child predators! Ugh!
Yikes, scary. I hope he doesn't get her, the pervert, ha.
very disturbing great use on the prompt
I agree, very disturbing and very sad because it all too often, happens.
Written well, but oh so scary....hopefully she will be safe!
This makes my stomach turn. Wow. Very well done. You definitely evoked emotion with this one. (I'd like to kill that bastard.)
xoRobyn
that just hurt my soul. It was beautifully written, but I hate to think that that stuff really goes on. Good job.
Creepy as can be. Kinda made me sick to my stomach.
"/
Oh dear, not nice. You wrote it well though.
What a superb piece of horror writing. you got all the nerves tingling.Thank you for introducing me to Mother May I. We don't have that here in the UK.
I'm hosting another 100 words that are different but you may like to have a go.
http://www.theheadsoffice.co.uk/100-word-challenge-for-grown-ups-week9/
Ouch, Jo!
This is so visual and gutsy, it seems possible! So sad that it is.
This is beautiful writing.
Namaste.........cj
PS - Thanks for your kind comment on "Ragtop."
Oh Yes, this gave me chills. What an ending for something that began so innocently. Great job! laurie
Being a teacher, it really scared me...
shreds
Accckkk!!!! ACCCCKKKK!!!! Holy moly.
This dark side of you makes me feel so shivery.
What compelling and believable writing.
RUN! RUN!
This was amazing.
oh, that gave me goose bumps, no kidding!
Sad thing is there people like that out there!
But you nailed the challenge now lets nail those kind to the wall!
hugs Lynn
Post a Comment