Saturday, September 10, 2011

Saturday Centus ~ The Game

Geez, Jenny's prompt started off so innocently for me as I jumped back in time and remembered playing the game in the school yard. The prompt "mother may I" ... my word count came in at 99.  Here's my offering ...

The school yard was busy with the games of recess ... watching the kids play "mother may I" he singled her out.  Her blonde curls were almost obscured by the hood of her red jacket, and she was at the back of the pack ... too shy to call out "mother may I", and too nervous to make a big move in the game.
Watching from across the road, he took a long drag on his cigarette and smiled in anticipation.  "Oh yes, he thought, she is just perfect ... she will be mine before the day is over."

eeeks, something sinister came as i wrote that ... i hate when that happens, but there you go ... make sure you visit other Centus players by clicking on Jenny's button below.

Jenny Matlock

16 comments:

Judie said...

Jo, this is a powerful piece. It gave me chills. Child predators are truly the scum of the earth. You did well, ny dear friend.

Annesphamily said...

This was so bone chilling! I'd like to see the ending, where he is capturing and hung upside down on a meat hook! Always been my fantasy for child predators! Ugh!

Viki said...

Yikes, scary. I hope he doesn't get her, the pervert, ha.

beckyp said...

very disturbing great use on the prompt

Daydreamertoo said...

I agree, very disturbing and very sad because it all too often, happens.

Karen S. said...

Written well, but oh so scary....hopefully she will be safe!

Rawknrobyn.blogspot.com said...

This makes my stomach turn. Wow. Very well done. You definitely evoked emotion with this one. (I'd like to kill that bastard.)
xoRobyn

Dazee Dreamer said...

that just hurt my soul. It was beautifully written, but I hate to think that that stuff really goes on. Good job.

Sue said...

Creepy as can be. Kinda made me sick to my stomach.

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Susannah said...

Oh dear, not nice. You wrote it well though.

jfb57 said...

What a superb piece of horror writing. you got all the nerves tingling.Thank you for introducing me to Mother May I. We don't have that here in the UK.


I'm hosting another 100 words that are different but you may like to have a go.
http://www.theheadsoffice.co.uk/100-word-challenge-for-grown-ups-week9/

cj Schlottman said...

Ouch, Jo!

This is so visual and gutsy, it seems possible! So sad that it is.
This is beautiful writing.

Namaste.........cj

PS - Thanks for your kind comment on "Ragtop."

laurie @ bargain hunting said...

Oh Yes, this gave me chills. What an ending for something that began so innocently. Great job! laurie

gautami tripathy said...

Being a teacher, it really scared me...

shreds

Jenny said...

Accckkk!!!! ACCCCKKKK!!!! Holy moly.

This dark side of you makes me feel so shivery.

What compelling and believable writing.

RUN! RUN!

This was amazing.

Lynn Stevens said...

oh, that gave me goose bumps, no kidding!
Sad thing is there people like that out there!
But you nailed the challenge now lets nail those kind to the wall!

hugs Lynn